Deutsch 2020 Aufsatz 2

Deutsch 2020
Aufsatz 2
Am 30. Oktober 2009 um 17.00 in Übungen in Blackboard fällig

Thema: Christiane Kerner: Mein Leben in der “neuen” DDR.

In dem Film Good Bye Lenin! sehen wir fast alles durch die Perspektive von Alex. Wir lernen eigentlich nicht, was seine Mutter wirklich gedacht hat. Der Film läßt also viele Fragen offen: Hat Christiane den Vortäuschungen ihres Sohnes wirklich geglaubt? Was hat sie gedacht, als sie den Coca-Cola Schild und danach den “fliegenden” Lenin gesehen hat? Warum entscheidet sie sich, ihren Kindern endlich die Wahrheit zu sagen? Was sagt sie ihrem Mann, wenn sie ihm zum letzten Mal sieht? Was denkt sie, wenn Lara ihr endlich die Wahrheit sagt? Was denkt sie, wenn Alex ihr seine letzte Videoaufnahme zeigt? Und was denkt sie, wenn sie am Abend das Feuerwerk sieht? Vielleicht haben Sie auch andere Fragen.

Versuchen Sie diese Fragen zu beantworten, indem Sie eine Geschichte aus der Perspektive von Christiane schreiben, die ihr Leben schildert, nachdem sie aus dem Koma erwacht ist. Benutzen Sie die erste Person (Ich-Form) und schreiben Sie in der Vergangenheit. (Write in the first person, and use the past tense.)

300-350 Worte, mit doppeltem Zeilenabstand getippt und mit einem Rechtschreibprogramm gecheckt.
MLA-Format; mit einem Rechtschreibprogramm überprüft

Evaluation Criteria for Compositions (These comments are intended to help you improve your writing. If on your second draft you fail to take comments into consideration (i.e. fail to work to improve your writing), you may lose additional points.)

Content (Information Conveyed)

Points

•On target (essay makes use of events from the film and of what you have learned about the historical context ); thorough and detailed; relevant; original, creative, and interesting for the reader

20

• adequate information; some development of ideas; some ideas could use more supporting detail or evidence

16

• Limited information; ideas present but not well developed; lack of supporting detail or evidence; some repetition

14

• Minimal information; information lacks substance; inappropriate or irrelevant information (incorrect response to prompt/assignment/ question); content is repeated or recycled; not enough information to evaluate (paper not of required length)

12

• Paper is plagiarized

0

Organization

• Logically and effectively ordered (clear paragraph structure); main points and details are connected; paper has a title, introduction, clear thesis and conclusion; fluent (good transitions)

20

• Order to the content clear, but could use better transitions; thesis is evident but could be clearer; loosely organized but main points do stand out; missing title

16

• Limited order to the content; lacks logical sequencing of ideas; ineffective ordering; very few transitions between paragraphs and ideas; unclear paragraph structure

14

• Series of separate sentences with no transitions; disconnected ideas; no apparent order to the content; paper lacks introduction and/ or conclusion; or not enough to evaluate (paper not of required length)

12

• Paper is plagiarized

0

Vocabulary

• Broad, precise, and effective word use and choice; extensive and creative use of vocabulary from WS6; varied use of verbs (and limited use of “haben” and “sein” as main verbs).

20

• Good use of vocabulary from current chapter. Some erroneous word usage or choice, but meaning is not confused or obscure; some use of words from previous chapters

16

• Erroneous word use or choice leads to confused or obscured meaning; some literal translations and invented words; limited use off words studied; use of English

14

• Overuse of translation machine or of dictionary

6-12

• Paper is plagiarized or completely written with a translation machine.

0

Language/ Structure

• very high level of accuracy in the areas of verb conjugation, word order, appropriate use of tense, nominative and accusative cases; paper was clearly self edited

20

• Some integration of grammar covered in current lesson; fairly accurate use of structures covered in previous lessons; structural errors do not impede comprehensibility; some editing for language evident but not complete

16

• Limited range of grammatical structures used; erroneous use of language often impedes comprehensibility; work was poorly edited for language

14

• Very limited range of structures. Non-German (often English) sentence structure; erroneous use of language makes many sentences incomprehensible; no evidence of having edited the work for the language; not enough to evaluate (paper not of required length)

12

• Overuse of translation machine or dictionary

5-10

• Paper is plagiarized or completely written with a translation machine

0

Format / Editing/ Spelling

• Spell check program was used correctly and to good effect, use of correct genre criteria (eg. Correct salutation and closing in a letter), correct use of MLA format as per instructions

20

• Some errors in MLA format, spelling. Genre form not quite correct.

16

• Several formatting and spelling errors.

14

• Extensive spelling errors. Demonstrates little sense of correct genre form

12

• Paper is plagiarized or completely written with a translation machine

0

TOTAL

/ 100

Content (Information Conveyed)	Points
•On target (essay makes use of events from the film and of what you have learned about the historical context* )*; thorough and detailed; relevant; original, creative, and interesting for the reader	20
• adequate information; some development of ideas; some ideas could use more supporting detail or evidence	16
• Limited information; ideas present but not well developed; lack of supporting detail or evidence; some repetition	14
• Minimal information; information lacks substance; inappropriate or irrelevant information (incorrect response to prompt/assignment/ question); content is repeated or recycled; not enough information to evaluate (paper not of required length)	12
• Paper is plagiarized	0
Organization
• Logically and effectively ordered (clear paragraph structure); main points and details are connected; paper has a title, introduction, clear thesis and conclusion; fluent (good transitions)	20
• Order to the content clear, but could use better transitions; thesis is evident but could be clearer; loosely organized but main points do stand out; missing title	16
• Limited order to the content; lacks logical sequencing of ideas; ineffective ordering; very few transitions between paragraphs and ideas; unclear paragraph structure	14
• Series of separate sentences with no transitions; disconnected ideas; no apparent order to the content; paper lacks introduction and/ or conclusion; or not enough to evaluate (paper not of required length)	12
• Paper is plagiarized	0
Vocabulary
• Broad, precise, and effective word use and choice; extensive and creative use of vocabulary from WS6; varied use of verbs (and limited use of “haben” and “sein” as main verbs).	20
• Good use of vocabulary from current chapter. Some erroneous word usage or choice, but meaning is not confused or obscure; some use of words from previous chapters	16
• Erroneous word use or choice leads to confused or obscured meaning; some literal translations and invented words; limited use off words studied; use of English	14
• Overuse of translation machine or of dictionary	6-12
• Paper is plagiarized or completely written with a translation machine.	0
Language/ Structure
• very high level of accuracy in the areas of verb conjugation, word order, appropriate use of tense, nominative and accusative cases; paper was clearly self edited	20
• Some integration of grammar covered in current lesson; fairly accurate use of structures covered in previous lessons; structural errors do not impede comprehensibility; some editing for language evident but not complete	16
• Limited range of grammatical structures used; erroneous use of language often impedes comprehensibility; work was poorly edited for language	14
• Very limited range of structures. Non-German (often English) sentence structure; erroneous use of language makes many sentences incomprehensible; no evidence of having edited the work for the language; not enough to evaluate (paper not of required length)	12
• Overuse of translation machine or dictionary	5-10
• Paper is plagiarized or completely written with a translation machine	0
Format / Editing/ Spelling
• Spell check program was used correctly and to good effect, use of correct genre criteria (eg. Correct salutation and closing in a letter), correct use of MLA format as per instructions	20
• Some errors in MLA format, spelling. Genre form not quite correct.	16
• Several formatting and spelling errors.	14
• Extensive spelling errors. Demonstrates little sense of correct genre form	12
• Paper is plagiarized or completely written with a translation machine	0
TOTAL	/ 100